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Chapter I

Spinner´s End, Cokeworth, Northern England.

October, 1998.

Severus put down the book and puffed heavily. It was the sixth time the bloody doorbell had rung.

Probably the teenage delinquents who were in the inconvenient habit of roaming Spinner´s End on occasion. During the past few years, they had been coming over to that abandoned part of town whenever they felt bored or were being chased by the police. As a matter of fact, with the street´s alarming state of decay, most of its houses deserted, it was rather surprising that the juvenile gangster-hopefuls didn´t come around to "visit" more often.

Spinner´s End was after all a perfect hiding place...Nobody better than Severus knew that...

But the fact was that Spinner´s End was ruined to such a degree that not even those little punks took a more than passing interest in it. Sometimes they entered an abandoned house to smoke, played some loud music (that is, if that godawful cacophony could be called "music" at all), or just wandered around cursing, fighting and generally raising hell, before getting bored and moving on to more interesting acts of vandalism.

After Severus had moved back, the little dunderheads had decided to stick around for longer, thrilled to have a potential new victim to play with. But a couple of simple charms managed to convince the youngsters that Spinner´s End was haunted, much to Severus´ amusement...Soon they had disappeared...And yet, after months of complete peace, there they were at it again.

They would learn their lesson this time....

He yanked the door open, his other hand reaching for the magically locked wooden cabinet where he kept his wand, but instead of a rowdy bunch of brats, all Severus saw was a woman standing at his door.

"Good afternoon..." she let out in a husky voice, a courteous smile on her lips.

"Good afternoon" he answered grudgingly "And before you waste your breath: whatever it is you´re advertising, I´m not interested."

With a flick of his wrist the door moved. But her hand stopped it before it could slam in her face. Taken aback, Severus opened the door again. Her gall had managed to catch his interest. He inspected the woman before him from head to toe, his eyes both focused and disdainful.

Certainly a muggle... about 30-years old, quite tall, probably around 5'8 or 5'9 (she had heeled boots on, though, so he could be wrong), with a sturdy yet willowy build. Her dark brown hair was held back in a tight ponytail that showed off a rather particular face: strong eyebrows, alert golden brown eyes, a Greek nose and a somewhat wide mouth. Her olive complexion showed rosy undertones in the chilly Autumn wind. She wore a brick red blouse, brown scarf and brown skirt, with a beige overcoat that, although elegant, looked a bit too light for the temperature outside. She was good-looking, Severus conceded...But that only made her presence at his doorstep all the more odd... Good-looking, well-dressed people were not an usual occurrence at Spinner´s End...

"I´m sorry to bother you... My name is Evelyn, Evelyn Black." She stretched out her hand, but Severus merely looked at her, motionless and uninterested. She cracked a very uneasy smile. It was obvious she was forcing herself to be polite in spite of his bluntness. Only now Severus noticed his visitor had a slight accent...he couldn´t quite pinpoint where from...Irish, maybe? Definitely not Scottish...Well, it didn´t matter.

"Uh...-she continued-I just moved here and..."

"You just...moved" Severus raised an eyebrow "Here?"

"Well, yes. Just this morning..."

"Why would you do that?" Why would anybody do that?, he thought to himself, but said nothing.

"It´s a long story, actually...."

"It was a rhetorical question..." Severus interrupted her, using a purposely condescending tone, a wry smile dancing on his thin lips. She was visibly annoyed now. Good. Only a matter of moments before she decided to leave him alone.

"Actually...I don´t plan on wasting too much of your time, let alone annoying you with unwelcome stories" She answered in a mellow tone filled with subtle contempt.

Severus rolled his eyes. He had obviously underestimated her.

"I´m just looking for someone..." She took out an old and rugged little notebook from her purse "Eileen Prince. Does she live here?"

Severus blinked and just stared at her for a long moment, completely disarmed.

"Snape..." He let out quietly

"I beg your pardon?"

"Eileen Snape...Prince was her maiden name..."

"Oh, so she does live here."

"Not anymore."

"I see..." Evelyn shifted on her feet "She moved then..."

"She´s dead.... Has been for twenty years actually."

Evelyn bit her lower lip, obviously embarrassed

"I´m sorry to hear that...In that case, I guess I should get going then..."

"Wait a minute, Miss...I´sorry, you said your name was..?"

"Black. Evelyn Black." As she relaxed and her accent came through more clearly... Irish...she was definitely Irish, Severus thought to himself "Mr... Snape, I assume?"

"Severus Snape..." He opened the door all the way and cocked his head back gesturing for her to come in.
EDIT: Many thanks to :iconpreseli: for the corrections!

I´m a liar, I know! I keep saying I´m not going to use Evelyn in a fic and here it is...Evelyn in a fic :blush:

I just had this idea floating on my mind for days now, and I had to write...

So there it is, Severus and Evelyn´s first meeting.

And no, don´t expect love at first sight or sugary romance...That´s not how Snape rolls (neither does Evelyn btw)

Still not sure if I continue or not... opinions, please? (My first ever Harry Potter fic, be gentle, ok? =P)

Severus Snape and Harry Potter © J.K.Rowling

Evelyn is all mine. ;P

EDIT: Decided to continue!!!! :dummy: Chapter II is here: [link]
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kuramaloveryum Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
STUNNING! I really really love your writing style. I love this imaginative introduction to your Evelyn. I love that your keeping very true to Snape's nature. Really digging this so far!
JosieCarioca Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!It´s been while I don´t get a comment in this chapter...felt good to come back to it (when I wrote it I wasn´t even thinking about continuing :XD:)I hope you keep reading (and enjoying it) :D
kuramaloveryum Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013
You're more than welcome. I loved the whole set. I was kind of sad their wasn't more ^^;
rouquinamour Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2011
Very good :) I enjoy her characterization, and he was in character as well - lovely!
JosieCarioca Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:bow: Thank you very much! Glad you like Evelyn and Snape´s characterizations. I worked really hard on keeping Snape "Snape-like" and giving Evelyn an interesting personality, so your comment really means a lot! :hug:
rouquinamour Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2011
Thanks :) I've written Snape fanfiction as well, and although it's a bit difficult to get Snape's characterization down, it's always satisfying to do so! It's also very hard to come by, and very satisfying to read :)
JosieCarioca Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, yes. Snape is a true pleasure to both read and write, when handled correctly. Writing him specially is so challenging and fun :D (sorta liberating in a way, too...Snape is the kind of guy who just don´t give a f*ck...Sometime I wish I was more like this :XD:)

I´ll check out your fics when I have the time! (I´ve been promising people left and right I´ll read their fics, but seriously can´t find the time :XD: It´s getting embarrassing :blush:)

I hope you enjoy the next chapters, if you read them... And thank you for the comments! :huggle:
JongKhan Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2011
Great beginning! I look forward to more chapters. You've piqued my interest here. Well done.
JosieCarioca Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, I´m glad to know that! :huggle: I´ll have a new chapter soon, so stay tuned ;P
Miss-Jose Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011  Hobbyist
No me interesan mucho los fics, así que de mi parte no vas a tener una lectora asidua... n_nU
En cuanto al capítulo,me encantó como interpretaste a Snape, usaste todas frases que él diría XD
Y me dejaste pensando por qué conoce a la madre de Snape... :confused:
Jeje, me encanta lo inteligente que es Eileen, enseguida se dio cuenta de que Snape se llamaba Snape :D
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